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Students learn how to revise their writing for clarity of meaning. They craft transitions between the paragraphs of their editorials that rephrase their opinion statements and clearly delineate their supporting arguments.
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Students learn how to revise their writing for clarity of meaning. They craft transitions between the paragraphs of their editorials that rephrase their opinion statements and clearly delineate their
Technology: LCD projector, laptop, Internet access or Writing Editorials CD, speakers, student computers with Internet access
Other Materials: Student folders, writers’ notebooks, and transitional phrases for the Teacher Model
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Students will revise their writing to incorporate transitions that clearly point out the arguments supporting their opinions.
What clues do editorial writers use to guide readers in making sense of and “buying into” the
Show lesson visuals, Revise for Clarity of Meaning.
Introduce Step 5 by showing the animated program, Revise. Explain that the time has come to turn drafts, completed in Step 4, into polished editorials that are ready for readers to appreciate. Over the next few lessons, students will get the chance to revise their work by looking at it in three different ways.
Tell students that the purpose of today’s lesson is to help make the meaning of their editorials as clear as possible, by inserting transitions that guide readers from paragraph to paragraph. Explain that good editorial writers are considerate of their readers. They provide them with clues to help make sense of the arguments in their written pieces. Students have already created signposts by crafting editorials with a clear structure. Today’s lesson will introduce another set of signals: the transitional phrases or sentences that usually appear at the beginning of body paragraphs.
While some students will already have used some transitions, explain that these early efforts might be too subtle, particularly for persuasive writing. As writers, students care about their topics and immediately see the connections between their opinions and their arguments. But readers need the connections to be pointed out to them, if they are to be convinced of the writer’s opinion.
Describe how transitions are often found at the beginning and ending of paragraphs. They rephrase the opinion statement and connect the opinion to each argument. The words and phrases in transitions should vary from one paragraph to the next in order to separate the arguments.
Demonstrate turning your opinion statement into a short phrase that can be repeated in transitions. Provide several examples of transitions, inserting your shortened opinion phrase in each one. Then, ask students to brainstorm phrases that might be used in transition sentences. Create a chart with these phrases for students to copy into their notebooks. Sample transitions include: (Sample shortened opinion phrase is in brackets)
Apply this approach to your own editorial, modeling how you revise to improve transitions. In your first body paragraph, include a transition to help connect your first sentence to your opinion statement. Add on a closing sentence that emphasizes your opinion statement.
Have students help you revise the first sentence of your second supporting argument to make the transition more effective. Emphasize how writers vary their transitions from one paragraph to the next in order to make their writing more interesting. Then, allow students to revise their own editorials with a focus on improving transitional phrases.
Note: Depending on your students’ computer proficiency, you may wish to show DD’s e-
Tutorial: Cutting and Pasting, which explains how to cut, copy, and paste text in a word
I’m going to look at this supporting argument paragraph and see how I can add a very clear connection between my supporting argument and my opinion statement. I can summarize my opinion statement as: NYC Transit needs to run more subway trains. My first sentence is: Overcrowded subways cause significant service problems like train delays and increased passenger injuries. Let me see if that meets the criteria for an effective transition. It doesn’t really relate to my opinion. I talk about crowded subways, but I don’t mention what I think needs to be done. I’m going to use one of our sentence starters and add that to the beginning of my first sentence: Another reason that NYC Transit needs to run more subway trains is that …
Now my opening sentence reads: Another reason that NYC Transit needs to run more subway trains is that overcrowded subways cause significant service problems like train delays and increased passenger injuries. That makes it clear that I am introducing a new argument and helps the flow of the paragraph. Let me add a final sentence to this paragraph to drive my point home. If NYC Transit added additional trains, not only would it relieve the overcrowding on the subways, it would also lead to fewer delays and improved passenger safety. Notice how I used a different transitional phrase than the one I used earlier to keep my writing interesting.
Distribute computers. Ask students to:
Students add transitions to their editorials that clearly signal to readers when they are beginning a new supporting argument. Circulate among students, encouraging them to vary their transitions. When there are five minutes remaining in Writer’s Work Time, remind students to resave their documents to Step 5 of the Online Classroom in the assignment titled Submit Your Revised Editorial.
Individual conferences: Ask students to read aloud portions of their editorials to hear if they flow from one idea to the next. Provide suggestions of transitional phrases from the class chart and insert the students’ shortened opinion phrase as an additional prompt.
Reconvene the class. Share an example of student work that demonstrates a transition that greatly clarifies the meaning of the paragraph. Expand the list of transitions used by students in class by asking for more suggestions from the class. Then give students a chance to jot down some additional transitional phrases in their notebooks. If they heard some that were better than the ones they selected, they can modify their transitions the next time they revise.
Review students’ editorials, comparing today’s drafts to their drafts from the previous lesson. Evaluate how effectively students have employed transitions to highlight the meaning of the body of their pieces. Use the Teacher’s Checklist to identify what students have completed to this point.